Teh Wozzinator

I agree that the last sentence should rhyme.... Your rhythm is good, and your rhyming is good also. I thought that the "cream cheese" part was kind of... cheesy... though. ...

Wow... Now we're getting into it, huh?! I like it.... Finally we actually "see" the Mutt, and witness it fight. Cool. I like it. No edits. Probably the coolest Mutts ...

I just wanted to say I read this--I've got to leave in a couple of minutes, but I wouldn't have the best crit anyways. Your writing style's great, and I ...

Yeah, I agree that you used too much "straight-out fact". And some of your sentences are... long and confusing. One that stood out was: "His father, also a sorcerer, trained ...

I agree, that first sentence was a bit much. I had to read through twice to understand it. lol! Anyways, after reading DoaV, this is a great change in plot, ...

hey jab!! It's about TIME you posted this! lol... It is long, but I don't think it's too long to read, even though it's too long for a good review ...

Um, I'm not even going to edit this right now, because it was way too hard to read.... Your grammar is terrible. You need quotation marks, something to set off ...

This was a bit confusing because... it doesn't really make sense. The lines don't fit together very well. I like your flow and your rhyming, and I liked the story ...

Wow!! I really liked this. You sound like a good journalist! Haha, this was my favorite chapter, because I finally figured out what the Mutts were!! (Although I had a ...

I like these stories, but this seemed kind of confusing to me--more than the others. No time for a "proper" review right now, but I'd just like to say that ...

I thought that this was quite good. I liked your imagery and I love the idea! But to me it doesn't seem all that much of a poem.... It seems ...

Well, this is really too short to give a good review on, but I will comment. I liked it, it has a good feel and descriptions. One thing that you ...

my edits in bold Chapter Two Part III Aedomir looked round and caught a glimpse of the passage they had come from. A major Major sounds interesting here...I don't know ...

my edits and comments are in bold The Fivefold Road Prologue, Roedra cast a glance behind her, steel grey eyes flickering over the men that trailed her. They were sullen, ...

Edits and comments in bold My Sister I have a sister I have known her I think that it would flow better if you got rid of the her since ...